About this snippet: Chapter One (Don’t Fear) The Reaper Snippet 6. Last week snippet is here.
Cecilia’s mother is watching a film of her dead husband’s band rehearsal, but Cecilia turns off the projector, making her mother acknowledge she is there.
This story is a WIP. The story is in the very early stages and has not been edited.
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Cecilia moved around the couch and took a seat next to her mother. She reached for the bottle but her mother moved it out of her reach. “I think you’ve had enough,” Cecilia told her gently.
“I’ll say when I have,” Phoebe hissed and her features hardened and her bloodshot eyes didn’t quite focus on her as she sneered.
She tried a different approach. “I’ve been phoning you and it’s been three days, Mom” she added for meaning.
Her mother’s brows puckered together. “Three days?” she repeated her words with a shaky voice, losing some of its hostility.
She nodded and her mother lowered her hand then finally handed her the bottle. She placed it on the coffee table to join the other bottles her mother had indulged in while she had her pity party with her dead father.
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Unofficial Blurb for End of the Road
Lars Gunner, the frontman for Silent Plaids, died 23 years ago and is trapped in limbo until his daughter, Cecilia, unearths his journal and is able to see him. His death was ruled an unfortunate accident, but he’s convinced it had to be murder despite the fact he can’t recall what happened in his last moments of life. Cecilia seeks the help from Kaleb, a psychic, but as they resurrect the past, the secrets and lies surrounding Lar’s rock and roll life just may be the death of them too.
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Yes, I think three days is enough for a pity party. I hope Cecilia can pull her mother out of her funk.
Jessica,
I would say so.
I think her mother needs professional help.
P.T.,
That she does.
Something tells me Mom lost track of time, in which case it really is time to put away the bottle!
Christina,
It would definitely be a good idea.
Very nice–lots of emotion going on between Cecilia and her mother. I think I’m going to like this book!
Nancy,
Thank you so much. So glad the snippet intrigued you.
You paint a sad perfect picture of daughter attempting to save mother. Heartbreaking, my friend.
Charmaine,
I’m glad it came across as so.
Well at least she got her mother to listen to her finally. Great snippet!
Veronica,
That is a start.
Finally she got through to her mother.
Finally, is right.
Cecilia’s a good daughter. She’s gentle with Mom, even though she could be harsh.
Andrea,
She is a good daughter. Mom is lucky to have her.
This is a very poignant scene. I hope she can get through to her mother.
Ed,
Thank you.
How sad for both of them, but worse for the daughter. She’s losing her mother to the bottle. This excerpt is well done. We can feel the emotion of both of them.
Diane,
Yes, she is losing her. So glad the emotions rang through.
How sad when the child becomes the parental force. Nice scene, Karen
Nancy,
Thank you.
Great story idea. What a hard situation.
Kimberly,
It is difficult.
Three days is a lot. Like liver cirrhosis levels. Seems like maybe her mom is listening, just a bit, so maybe there’s hope.
Caitlin,
Yes, she is not well.
Three days?! Good Lord. At least that part registered with her mom. Great snippet!
That’s such a sad situation, for everyone involved. I hope Phoebe is able to find some peace and harmony eventually, both with Cecilia and herself.
Poor girl. Dealing with a parent who is either an alcoholic or on a bender can’t be easy. Great snippet.
Three days? Time for a shower and a decent meal…
Nothing like the realization of time to slap some sense into you. I’m not sure I want to know how many bottles are on that table.
Daelyn,
You probably don’t. lol
Cecelia seems like she’s had some practice handling her mom through a crisis before. Well written, Karen! The scene comes through quite vividly!
Teresa,
Thank you. Glad you enjoyed the snippet.