Welcome to Snippet Sunday. Since it’s is creeping closer to Halloween, I thought I’d changes things up a bit. This is a snippet from my Halloween short story from the Myths, Legends, and Midnight Kisses Collection.
Enjoy a snippet from Abraham’s UN-DEAD . Feedback is always appreciated.
If you’re interested in last week’s snippet of Rodeo Blues here you go: Chapter Three, Snippet 11
Snippet: This is from Chapter Two where Adryanna and Bram (vampires), decide to help an ailing lad (7 year old, Abraham) with a few drops of their blood. They aren’t going to change them, but their blood tends to heal some ailments. This is their hope for Abraham and they have entered the child’s room after he’s been put to bed.
The year is 1854, Dublin, Ireland. This is in Bram’s POV. Young Abraham is speaking first.
*The excerpt may have been modified to fit the 10 sentence limit.
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“Are you and your wife one of the dreach-fhola that guard the Magillycuddy Reeks in Kerry?” Young Abraham asked.
The child’s body may betray him, but his memory was sharp. Adryanna and he had spun a tale of the blood-drinking faeries that lived in the Castle of the Blood Visage. As the fable went: the faeries helped the kings rule and win battles in exchange for blood. Nothing of the sort ever happened as the story suggested, but it kept the myth alive in the hearts’ of men, that nightwalkers were only figments of a creative mind and naught more.
“We are something of the sort,” Adryanna said and both Bram and Abraham turned toward the window where Adryanna now stood on the ledge, her warm colored strands glimmering reddish-gold in the starlight and she appeared more angel than vampyre with her beauty. “However,” she said as she stepped into the room, “you have no need to fear me or Bram, young Abraham. We are your friends. You do believe us, I pray.”
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“…her warm colored strands glimmering reddish-gold in the starlight and she appeared more angel than vampyre with her beauty.” Nice visual, Karen. I really like the little tale they spun. Nicely done!
Very other-worldly! I love the tone of this piece Karen. So if they are friends, what is Abraham to them? Very intriguing.
Bram and Adryanna are friends of Abraham’s parents.
Like it!! Very nice feel with the whisper of lore and the tease of potential threat. Warms things up for the holiday.
Nancy,
So glad you liked the snippet. 🙂
I really liked how you explained the myth. Nicely done, Karen. 🙂
Siobhan,
So glad you like the myth. 🙂
Fantastic snippet! Really enjoyed the detail of the characters and storyline.
Lorien,
Thanks so much!
Wildly fascinating premise and I loved the tone of the excerpt!
Veronica,
So glad you like the tone of the story. 🙂
Sometimes myths are just stories . . . sometimes they have a hint of truth to them!
Caitlin.
Yes, they do. 🙂
I’m intrigued and want to know more — like what’s wrong with Abraham and why they want to help him.
As readers we have the advantage of seeing things from the vampires’ POV, so we know Abraham should trust them. From the boy’s POV, however, this is a tough decision.
Super intrigued. Love sound of this world you’ve created.
I love the line about her warm colored strands glimmering in the starlight. I hope they’re able to help the little boy and form a friendship.
“blood-drinking faeries”? Interesting excerpt.
Fun! Who doesn’t love Irish vampire faeries? I really like the tone you adopt for this piece. Creepy and classic.
Great snippet. 🙂
Terrific visuals. I love the gentle way she asks for his trust.
That’s a very strange mix of characters. I wonder what is the interest of the vampires in Abraham.
Eerie–in a beautiful, dangerous, faery sort of way. Nicely done!
Love this line: “…her warm colored strands glimmering reddish-gold in the starlight and she appeared more angel than vampyre with her beauty.”
Great imagery on her. I like the folklore of the blood-drinking fairies, it’s different. Interesting snippet, and perfect for Halloween.