About this snippet: Chapter One (Don’t Fear) The Reaper Snippet 5.ย Last week snippet is here.
Cecilia’s mother is watching a film of her dead husband’s band rehearsal. Cecilia for a moment feels sorry for her mother, knowing the woman never got over losing her husband. (I’m jumping ahead a few sentences. A little creative editing for the sentence limit)
This story is a WIP. The story is in the very early stages and has not been edited.
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No matter how the world wanted to immortalize him as a musical genius, he was just a man who didn’t give a crap about his family. She marched over to the projector and turned it off, and the room was swept into darkness.
“What the f***?” her mother screeched and ruined any pity she might have felt for her moments before. Her mother wasn’t a saint either.
She reached for the lamp next to the couch and turned it on. They weren’t in the dark, but the lamp in no way illuminated the room into brilliance.
“Lars?” her mother said as she turned to look at her.
She sighed and moved closer so her mother’s bleary vision could focus on reality and said, “It’s me, Cecilia…you know, your daughter.”
Phoebe turned away in her seat with a huff and it was obviously, she wasn’t too drunk to recognize sarcasm. “I know who you are,” she grumbled and lifted the bottle to her lips.
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Unofficial Blurb for End of the Road
Lars Gunner, the frontman for Silent Plaids, died 23 years ago and is trapped in limbo until his daughter, Cecilia, unearths his journal and is able to see him. His death was ruled an unfortunate accident, but he’s convinced it had to be murder despite the fact he can’t recall what happened in his last moments of life. Cecilia seeks the help from Kaleb, a psychic, but as they resurrect the past, the secrets and lies surrounding Lar’s rock and roll life just may be the death of them too.
TWO WORLDS COLLIDED has been nominated at Preditors and Editors for Best Sci-fi Novel. Sure would love your vote: http://critters.org/predpoll/novelsf.shtml. Sure would appreciate your vote. If you have a book nominated there, let me know. ๐
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Wow, I can feel the tension in that room. Plus, a bit of hopelessness. Nice snippet! ๐
Jessica,
Thanks. So glad the emotions rang through.
A poignant scene that makes me sympathize with Cecelia.
Ed,
I’m glad it does. ๐
What a vivid and painful moment. Well done, Karen. The emotions simply vibrate.
Nancy,
I’m so glad the emotions came through in the snippet.
Very natural and poignant.
Aurora,
Thank you.
You paint quite a memorable scene. Happy family, right? I don’t think so. Well done and drags the reader right in.
Consider obvious instead of obviously. A thought.
Frightening! Great snippet.
Wow–fantastic character development. Your writ8ing is super smooth, Karen. ๐
I hope 2017 brings good things for you. ๐
I have no post up this week. ๐
You can be good at something and still not be a good person–or a good parent. Interesting interaction–it shows a lot about their relationship in a few words.
Eeep, not a great situation to be in. Congrats on the nomination! Best of luck in it!
Such a sad scene in so many ways, but it rings true to the characters. I’m fascinated by the premise for the book and can’t wait for more! Great snippet…
Love how you painted the scene, so vivid. Her mother certainly doesn’t sound like no saint. The “you know, your daughter” line makes my heart break for Cecilia. I can only imagine what it must be like living with her mother now.
I’m so sorry for her, but I think she knows how to handle her mother when she’ like that. Sad that people let themselves get addicted that way. ๐ Great scene.
Doesn’t seem like a warm and fuzzy family relationship.
Great snippet and LOVE the cover!
Elizabeth,
Thank you so much. Glad you like the cover and enjoyed the snippet.