About this snippet: Chapter Two (Cemetery Gates) Snippet #16. Check out last week’s snippet from Chapter Two snippet #15 here.
Setup for this snippet with a recap from last week: Cecilia glanced at the journal that she still held in her hand. “Earlier, did you knock the journal off the desk?” She met his gaze then. “And if you did, how are you able to touch the journal but you can’t touch me?”
“I concentrated on moving the air around the journal so I wasn’t actually touching anything.” He lifted those broad shoulders of his in a shrug.
She remembered that gesture from when she was little. Something so familiar it made her eyes sting. She missed the gesture that had been so much a part of him. How had she forgotten about it until now?
“I’m not a scientist or whatever,” he was still talking and she had to force herself to concentrate on his words. “I told you I don’t know how this works or why.” His gaze slid over her with what she thought might be appreciation.
Not ten sentences, but this was a better place to stop. The next few lines need to be together so they don’t sound odd.
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I’m busy working on edits…
Blurb:
Lars Gunner, the frontman for Silent Plaids, died 23 years ago and has been trapped in limbo until his daughter, Cecilia, unearths his journal and is able to see him. His death was ruled an unfortunate accident, but he’s convinced it was murder despite the fact he can’t recall what happened to him in his last moments of life. Cecilia seeks help from Kaleb, a psychic, but as they resurrect the past, the secrets and lies surrounding Lars’ rock and roll life just may be the death of them too.
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36 thoughts on “Something familiar….End of the Road @KMNbooks #8sunday #snippetsunday”
I like your explanation for why he can move certain items. Maybe he could use the air trick with her. Great snippet, Karen. 🙂
Thanks, Siobhan.
Love it and the premise–though that last line is kind of creepy? Sounds almost as if her dad is checking her out. However, maybe with more context (or the line that comes after), it would make more sense.
It’ll make sense when you read the next lines. 🙂
Ghosts probably don’t know the in-depth explanations for how they do what they do! I think just about everyone can relate to feeling a swell of longing when reminded of something that was so much a part of a lost loved one.
So glad it came through that way.
Liked it, esp her “awakened” memory of his gesture. Great touch!
Iris,
So glad you did.
I’m overwhelmed with this story. Eerie, touching and just plain wonderful, Karen.
Charmaine,
Thank you so much. Lovely compliment.
I like the touching resurgence of memory.
Aurora,
I’m so glad it came through the way it did. 🙂
Nooooo, don’t stop!! A tender reminiscence leading to things that are about to get . . . not so pleasant.
Nancy,
Thank you. So glad you’re intrigued for more.
Great snippet, very emotional .
So glad you enjoyed the snippet, Elyzabeth.
That middle paragraph is stellar. Nice job!
Amy,
So glad you liked it.
Good explanation, not too science-y or too supernatural. Fits the tone of your story. Enjoyed the snippet…
Veronica,
Just what I was going for.
I like the concept of your story, it’s very intriguing. I hope Cecilia will find a solution and be able to help her father.
Fanni,
It won’t be easy, but that will be her goal.
I love that she recognized his shrug, hidden in her subconscious.
AR,
I’m so pleased you enjoyed the snippet. 🙂 Thank you.
I like how touching brought back a special memory.
Elaine,
So glad that you do.
I think that even if he were a scientist, he’d still be unable to explain what’s going on.
Ed,
Yes so very true.
How touching that she remembers that gesture. Nice scene.
Diane,
Thank you.
It’s amazing what we don’t realize we remember, isn’t it? That last line is a little weird by itself, though!
Caitlin,
It is amazing how a memory will pop into our heads.
I found this snippet very poignant, the shrug re-awakening memories!
Hywela,
Thank you.
I am looking forward to the next few lines! I really like this story, Karen. 🙂
I like your explanation for why he can move certain items. Maybe he could use the air trick with her. Great snippet, Karen. 🙂
Thanks, Siobhan.
Love it and the premise–though that last line is kind of creepy? Sounds almost as if her dad is checking her out. However, maybe with more context (or the line that comes after), it would make more sense.
It’ll make sense when you read the next lines. 🙂
Ghosts probably don’t know the in-depth explanations for how they do what they do! I think just about everyone can relate to feeling a swell of longing when reminded of something that was so much a part of a lost loved one.
So glad it came through that way.
Liked it, esp her “awakened” memory of his gesture. Great touch!
Iris,
So glad you did.
I’m overwhelmed with this story. Eerie, touching and just plain wonderful, Karen.
Charmaine,
Thank you so much. Lovely compliment.
I like the touching resurgence of memory.
Aurora,
I’m so glad it came through the way it did. 🙂
Nooooo, don’t stop!! A tender reminiscence leading to things that are about to get . . . not so pleasant.
Nancy,
Thank you. So glad you’re intrigued for more.
Great snippet, very emotional .
So glad you enjoyed the snippet, Elyzabeth.
That middle paragraph is stellar. Nice job!
Amy,
So glad you liked it.
Good explanation, not too science-y or too supernatural. Fits the tone of your story. Enjoyed the snippet…
Veronica,
Just what I was going for.
I like the concept of your story, it’s very intriguing. I hope Cecilia will find a solution and be able to help her father.
Fanni,
It won’t be easy, but that will be her goal.
I love that she recognized his shrug, hidden in her subconscious.
AR,
I’m so pleased you enjoyed the snippet. 🙂 Thank you.
I like how touching brought back a special memory.
Elaine,
So glad that you do.
I think that even if he were a scientist, he’d still be unable to explain what’s going on.
Ed,
Yes so very true.
How touching that she remembers that gesture. Nice scene.
Diane,
Thank you.
It’s amazing what we don’t realize we remember, isn’t it? That last line is a little weird by itself, though!
Caitlin,
It is amazing how a memory will pop into our heads.
I found this snippet very poignant, the shrug re-awakening memories!
Hywela,
Thank you.
I am looking forward to the next few lines! I really like this story, Karen. 🙂
Love the little touch of a memory.